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The 5 Senses
Seeing the bees,
Watching them fed,
Listening to trees,
Smelling the leaves,

Touching the snow,
Watching flowers grow,
Seeing them in rows,
Feeling the wind blow,

Hearing the wish,
Smelling so swift,
Seeing the lift,
Feeling the drift,

Feeling the tear,
Seeing unclear,
Smelling the fear,
Tasting cold steel,

Feeling the pain,
Tasting the vein,
Hearing the rain,
Smelling insane,

Seeing the night sky,
Hearing the car drive by,
Feeling the grass as I lay,
Being happy as I die..

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©devin 2002-2005

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Depression.. what else is there left unsaid?

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To me, it seems like a very emotional poem. Its interesting what people come up with while they are in depression. It really makes you think. This poem is great, and it reminds me of Pink Floyd in a way... ;) (Wink) =) (Smile) Great job Devin.
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wow...that was great. the different kinds of emotions expressed here are just awesome. the connection between the different senses is great and the imagery is excellent. the lines:

"Feeling the pain,
Tasting the vein,
Hearing the rain,
Smelling insane"

are my favs...i dont know why...but they are...you described these feelings in an unimaginable way and its just wonderful

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